Don’t write about what you are going to write about; just write about it! You write as if you are going to tell a story, but you never tell it. Why did you go to D.C.? What did you do there? How was it such a powerful experience? Tell about the friends you made. Allow your readers to feel the same feelings you felt by describing things in detail. Names help; faces do, too. Character traits make names and faces come to life; anecdotes make characters believable. You very briefly describe your experiences in paragraph 2, but you don’t devote much time to it for your readers to buy that it was such a profound experience. Since you only describe it vaguely, it seems like it was no big deal.
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