It seems like you mean to imply that accidents lead to more awareness. Your “everyone has their faults” paragraph suggest that, but you never develop that idea enough to prove that point. Even in your discussion of Oed, you just gloss over that idea, assuming that your readers believe or even understand you. It seems a big mistake to make that assumption. The way you narrate your events makes it seem like it wasn’t a big deal. You cut yourself, but you washed it off and made it through your day just fine. You don’t emphasize anything you learned or how lucky you are that it wasn’t worse or even how bad the cut actually was. Because of that, the reader is left wondering why this was an even worth reading about.
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