You need to build the case of [the character] using [the other character] due to a lack of power earlier than you do. The rest of your arguments depend on that idea. Staying more focused on showing what [the character’s] “standards of manly conduct” are — and how [the other character] falls short of those and finally how [the character] uses those short comings to her advantage — would strengthen this.
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Show Standards Not Met
Tuesday, May 8th, 2007Just An Introduction
Tuesday, May 8th, 2007Your explanations are clear and you’ve got a strong pattern of telling why you include the quotations and examples that you do. This would be stronger if [the character’s] character traits were tied more directly to the things we see everyday. A greater discussion of how [the character] exhibits all the characteristics of modern peer pressure or how [the character’s] persuasion techniques are just like modern ad campaigns would help. This reads like just an introduction to this idea.
No Evidence
Tuesday, May 8th, 2007With no evidence from the play, it’s hard for your readers to take this as a serious discussion. You haven’t supported any reason that you relate [a character from the story] to your parents. So this reads like a paper written by someone who hasn’t ever read the [play, novel, short story, article, etc.].